Friday, May 20, 2011

Hush Little Baby...

Here is my contribution to Week 54 of Saturday Centus. I have no idea where this came from. It sounds right to me when I read it out loud but I don't know if the dialogue will feel correct to you. The prompt is in bold and you can read other contributions by just clicking here.

Either way...this is what came to me this week. Now that mine is posted, can't wait to see what you all thought of.




I’se jess hunkerin' down. Hunkerin' down over this young’un in my arms. My heart it pound…pound…pound so hard I know de massa gwonna hear it. I feel dis baby rootin…rootin to eat but I ain’t got none. I’se too old for milk but if she cry she’s gwonna get us both dead. My heart pound…pound…pound…

I nuzzle down to hers milk-sweet neck of ‘dis babe in my arms. It ain’t my babe. But dat don' matter none.

I hears him walk closer. I puts my forehead down to hers and hopes she can hear what I be thinkin’… Hush little baby, don't you cry now.

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12 comments:

Dazee Dreamer said...

oh my. that was so good. I could actually see it all.

Ms. A said...

Sounds good to me!

Betty (picture circa 1951) said...

OK, the baby isn't hers and she's hiding it from who? Is she a slave and the master is coming or is it her husband? I guess I want you to write the next chapter for me.

Judie said...

Hmmmm! Did you just watch "Roots" again, Miz Jenny? This is way good! I can hardly wait to see what you are giving us for a prompt tomorrow!!!

gayle said...

Loved this! Wonderful!!

Ames said...

She's saving that baby isn't she. From who? Or is she hiding out herself and afraid the baby she's watching will give her away? Very good dialect Miz Jenny you done gooood!~Ames

Amy said...

Jenny, that just gave me chills! Wow. You are amazing, that is for sure.

Jayne Martin said...

Really good. And I earned my living for many years as a tv writer so I know dialogue. Love the dresser! You're multi-talented!

RNSANE said...

I loved this, Jenny, reminded me of my Southern roots and all the suffering so many went through in the South. Sorry I missed Alphabe Thursday this week.

Susannah said...

Very powerful Jenny!

Sue said...

Wow. That's a good one!

=)

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You had me feeling as though I was right there. I could see it.