Sunday, October 31, 2010

My Saturday Centus Shake-up Post!

Jenny Matlock

I just really have to ask, "Who wrote this dumb prompt anyway? And only gave us 50 words?" OK, this was a challenge.

And this is the best I've got. I know I have a few 'tense' errors in the story but I'm still posting it anyway. So there!

Prompt is in bold. And you can click here to link to other more grammatically correct AND interesting Saturday Centus Shake-ups posts!

Ahem....

You can call me John. OK? Here’s the thing about hanging out in the psych ward…all those paranoid schizophrenic weirdos think they are the real deal. They’re certainly all certifiable. One guy, Abraham Lincoln was a lot shorter than I thought he would be...or remembered. I should know. I distinctly remember him being ten inches taller then me when I shot him.

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22 comments:

lissa said...

intriguing piece, certainly it's hard tell any type of story in 50 words, well done

noexcuses said...

I love this! I did not participate, because 100 words is hard enough for me. The stress was just too much! But it was a great challenge, and you have some really good stories!

Thanks for hosting all of your great memes!

noexcuses said...

Great challenge this week! I love your story, too!

Ames said...

I liked it! :)~Ames

Jackie said...

omg that was terrific Jenny!

Jenners said...

I have to say that this week's prompt is scaring me ... but you done good! I'll have to ponder this a bit more.

Kim Lehnhoff said...

Good response to a challenging prompt!

I must be weird, I had no trouble limiting myself to 50 words on this one - and I knew almost within seconds what I would write about.

After that, it was just editing.

Marlene said...

Oh, you're good!! My first fifty words would be.....Um....ahhh....Uhhh....well.....so.....yeah....like.....(you get the picture).

Judie said...

Hahaha! I know that guy! He was in the room down the hall from me when I thought I was the illetimate child of Pablo Picasso.

cj Schlottman said...

Jenny,

This is way cool! Well written, as usual. And you think I am nuts..................cj

Malisa said...

Love those twists and turns! A fantastic final line too! Personally, I like the 50 word challenge. So much can be said in so few words!

Good to be back!

Malisa

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

Very clever, Jenny. I love this, and it kind of freaks me out.
xoRobyn

People Who Know Me Would Say: said...

mwahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!

This is soooooooooo excellent and terrifically funny!!!!

Tracy said...

well done should deffinatley speak to the creater.

Kat said...

Good one Jenny! Loved your take on the prompt. And the story is appropriate, because this challenge was NUTS LOL! Kat

Cheryl said...

Crazy good!

Terra said...

The psych ward...that was a creative twist! Don't you hate it when your have to kick yourself for your own doings...50 words was a beast! But you did it and that is the whole point right, to do it!!!

Susan Anderson said...

Great job, Jenny. Generally speaking, I enjoy those artists who take their work in a psych ward direction.

They make me feel so sane.

;)

PS. It's all relative, right?

Viki said...

I guess it takes one to know one. Of course I mean the guy claiming to be John LOL. Good job. I gotta say 50 words was tough.

Unknown said...

And you hit it out of the park! Nice. This was a fun one. When I 1st read the prompt I didn't think it would but it really was. And everyone came at it from a different angle!

Tgoette said...

LOL! That was a great story and the twist at the end was perfect! We need more stories about psych wards! Or maybe I'm just getting nostalgic. Ahh, memories...

Excellent job, Jen, as usual!

Gotta go. The purple fuzzy whiffleburps are trying to nozzle my gloobysnits! Come to me, magic spoon! Krumdle their cheesy toofas! (Don't worry, this happens all the time!)

Unknown said...

Clever, creepy, ingeniously crafted! The perfect picture of a madman in a madhouse who does not think he belongs there.
Weird and intriguing!

Thank you for your kind words about my SC-Lincoln-post. Sorry I am so late about commenting. But I am doing it, as you see.

Best wishes & hugs,
Anna

For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC-Shake-up-post Week 26