Sunday, October 2, 2011

No Longer in Service - Saturday Centus

Take a deep breath everybody.

This is fiction.

It's not Mr. Jenny...it's inspired by husband number one...but that was a long, long, long time ago in a galaxy far far away!

I used the phrase multiple times...again...

Each one is in bold.

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NO LONGER IN SERVICE


I’ve shut out all the awful things
you did because I wore your ring.
Don’t call.
The number you have reached
is no longer in service.
I bought the crap you owned my soul
You needed me, I was your girl.
Don’t call,
the number you have reached
is no longer in service
.
Yeah, yeah, I hear you’ll die without me
Yeah, yeah, it’s me that makes you crazy.
Don’t call.
The number you have reached
is no longer in service.
I’ve disconnected all your lies
My co-dependant ways have died.
Don’t call again, the girl you reached
is no longer in service.


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31 comments:

Sue said...

Sheer brilliance.

(the message AND the meter)

=D

Barbara F. said...

I can really relate to this Jenny! Actually made me smile, because I know how much I have matured. xo

beckyp said...

great post :-)

Busy Bee Suz said...

Wow. And powerful.
xoxo

Morning said...
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Morning said...

love it,

:)

shannon i olson said...

I know a few young folks that should read this and disconnect the number now!

Dazee Dreamer said...

very well said. I want to send this link to a few woman I know that need to hear that.

upinthecosmos said...

Love it, I think I know some people who should use it:-)

cj Schlottman said...

Jenny,

I love this poem! It is strong and lyrical and tells a vivid story, one I have lived myself.

Namaste.........cj

Glad you are feeling better.

pameladoughty.com said...

I'm thinking that this would make an awesome song. Not hip enough to suggest the band... any takers on that?

Ms. A said...

I, too, have one I disconnected from eons ago.

Vicki/Jake said...

Oh ya, raw truth at it's finest, and you say it's fiction... One of your best moments Jenny:) Woot Woot!!

5thsister said...

Oh Jenny! I love what you did with the prompt. Writing releases, don't you think? I could definitely feel the emotion of this piece. You are a funny gal with humorous posts. With that said I must say that I do like it when you are able to switch gears and write a dark piece every once in a while.

Mama Zen said...

Excellent!

Ames said...

Bravo! So glad you dummped his sorry butt. Men ar so full of themselves if they think woman buy that crap. Eventually every woman wakes up and smells the coffee!~Ames

Kerri @OhMann! said...

Unfortunately, I had a #1 like that too!

Judie said...

Hmmmm! This sounds soooooo familiar! We survived, though, didn't we, Jenny!!!!

June Freaking Cleaver said...

You know how I love the dark side...welcome!

Isn't it great when our selection skills improve after we decide we deserve better?

Nonna Beach said...

Outstanding ! You tell him Jenny and glad you got that off your chest ! Wish a few women I know would just cross their ex's off their lists at last and forever too !!!

PⒿ @ $ € € ₦$ ₣®0₥... said...

You rock, Matlock!

And this centus says it all, for so many of us.

You've just written an anthem.

Kudos!

Cheryl said...

Simply awesome!

Karen S. said...

Lovely! Non-Fiction comment by me- having lived that experience myself! Hooray your fiction girl did marvelously.....Jenny this was fantastic...and I can think of a couple of "friends 0f mine" that could use these words for themselves....! Bravo, your prompt this week again, is just simply coolness! I love all the stories it has brought out! Thanks!!!!

Rocky Mountain Woman said...

absolutely awesome....

wow...

The Cello Strings said...

disconnected with all your lies,

love the lie.

you rock!

The Cello Strings said...

oops, love the line,

powerful take.

Deborah said...

Brilliantly written/said/done!!!

Viki said...

Good for her. It sometimes take a long time to realize they are being wronged. Great centus.

The Quintessential Magpie said...

You go, girl!

XO,

Sheila

Amy said...

powerful! Love it. You really know how to hit home, don't you? I think this is one everyone can relate to.

Splendid Little Stars said...

woohoo!