The hurtful words, uttered with such disgust made me strive even harder to impress the bad-tempered teacher.
After much deliberation I finally inscribed these eloquent words, “There I was during a murky and turbulent nighttime.”
I read it several times. It was good. I could do better. I tried again. “It was a dark and stormy night.”
Brilliant. I was certain that next writing class, Stow-it Goette would have nothing but praise and accolades.
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He is such a harsh task master isn't he Jenny! I think it's good! Great to be the first to comment. Because of the time difference I'm usually no.130!
lol - I love it!
It's great!
Speaking of time differences, we're so pleased Alphabe-Thursday-Mr Linky's moved forward a tad! Appearing now at midnight rather than 2am here in mainland/continental Europe (where we're GMT+2) is certainly a step in the right direction!
Hope you're all having a great Labor Day Weekend,
Nora & Lola:)
This is my favorite - by far!
You'd think you'd been edited once or twice in your life!!
Brilliantly done! Bravo! Bravo!
I loved the way you deftly characterized your teacher's constructive criticisms as being mean-spirited and malicious.
It totally hides the fact that his anger is simply misdirected inner turmoil brought on by being sad and lonely.
I'm sure that his contemptuousness could be alleviated if you gave him a big hug and then each of the other girls in your class in turn did the same. Say that might make for an interesting continuation!
Perfect! Concise and to the point. What's not to love about it! Way to go Jenny!
Is Tom begging for hugs in his comment? Ok, back to you, I loved this. I like how the simple route seemed to be brilliant to your character...I also liked the murky and turbulent - made me laugh! You never cease to amaze me!
I have a feeling that the exacting professor would not be happy no matter what you wrote - but isn't that a way of improving output?
Fun! What writer has not turned handsprings and begged for approval from a teacher, editor or the public?
LOL, great job. Poor Tom.
what fun & clever - thanks for hosting these writing memes!
what a nasty teacher. or maybe hes one of those trying to push more out of you?
but im gonna say hes a nasty piece of ..... !!!
loved the ending where you changed the sentance to the stormy night one. good fun.
Ahem, Tom, that would be women.
Now that we've gotten that out of the way, it's quite obvious that your professor is a male-chauvenist pig who's got it in for you, Dear Jenny. I think you need to find a new professor's class to take next semester. Humph!
Jenny, leaving in a few, but please remember Mr. Magpie in your prayers. He is having surgery in the morning. Details on my blog. Hurrying.
THANKS!
XOXO,
Sheila :-)
You rock my world Jenny!
Ha! Professor Goette is a tough task master! Not easily pleased...sarcasm dripping from the red inked words scribbled across your pages. You got him this time! ;( Maybe not.
I just posted two assignments in one post. I'm bad, but please visit me anyway!
Malisa
This was brilliant Jenny! "Stow-it Goette" - I'm laughing myself silly here. This has been a fun week, every one is so flippin' creative!
How could Tom have missed your brilliance? Perhaps there was a little pen envy going on here.
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Hahaha I love this! Thesaurus's are my best friend, especially when it comes to trying to impress harsh professors.
Professor Goette thinks your writing is trite and unoriginal? What! Well just between you and me, I know Professor Goette is actually a sham. He just bought a placard that said Professor. haha :)
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